Week 31 – Student A’s Response: 2nd Draft

Standard

Second Draft – Having made the changes to her draft, she gave her paper to another student to have it scored for her.  You can see the remarks he made on her paper.  Because they were specifically looking at the trait of Organization, you will notice that he marked transitions as he saw them.  He also used the language of the rubric to give her feedback.  He first gave her a three out of five based on the rubric, but upon reflection, upgraded it to a 4, a fair score.  Notice that he does not comment on grammar and mechanics, that will be the focus of the next draft.  She will take his recommendations into account and put them in play when revising for her third draft.

2nd draft tree 1

2nd draft tree 2
2nd draft tree 3

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